Current mood:

accomplished

Story: I'm not dead yet! I feel happy!
FINALLY did some more work. I'm feeling in an OFic kick too, so probably more on this and also maybe some stuff for SJ (because I am feeling extremely guilty about that one).

Basically, a little while ago I reread chapter one and while I knew there were a lot of things about chapter one that sucked, I forgot just how many and was depressed. Chapter two is beautiful as ever (as much as it can be, unedited, at least), but one and three were looking icky and I just could not in good conscience start chapter four with them like that.

Rewrite time.

Chapter three was actually in better shape than I remembered because I did a partial rewrite halfway through writing the chapter and because I came up with so many nifty things, like "i-SKARIOT". :D I may not play many video games, but I have friends who do and I read MegaTokyo a lot (just got vol. 2!!), and that sure as hell looks like a cool video game name to me. I love it when I can come up with names that don't sound contrived.

Anyway, chapter one caught the brunt of it (still is, in fact). Basically, I'm commiting mass infanticide and the twenty page chapter is going to get sliced down to maybe half that. I am pretty much taking out ALL of the secondary character backgrounds because they are useless and time-consuming and I will rewrite the sighting the pack scene, because I have NEVER liked how that turned out. I am also refining the characterization work I did for Jone in order to correspond to what he seems to be coming in later chapters.

Aside from that, chapter two is brilliant. I am a god. The atmosphere is perfect. The timing conveys both the humour and the tragedy of the situation. His father is characterized simply and perfectly. MUAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!